Response to Presentation

In my Presentation I was informed of a few areas in my work that needed to be changed and/or needed improvement.  From the feedback I was told to change the thickness of the walls and keep the gaps between the walls the same thickness, so the other way round to what they were. In conjunction to this they would like to see the walls go from thick to thin.  My key perspectives could have done with a few more people incorporated into them. They would have liked to have seen the awkwardness of the tunnel and suggested to photograph someone in awkward positions as they can be hard to find.  All my finals need a 'wash through' which I was already aware of as I wasn't completely satisfied with what I presented. The outside, organic, open space needs to be made more comfortable, suggestion was to add some furniture.  The outside space feels almost sculptor like, which isn't necessarily a bad thing but thats just the feel it gives. The plan was placed into a not so great surrounding for its context.

To start with in response to this constructive feedback I have gone back to sketch up and changed my model.  I have completely gotten rid of the outside walls and will photoshop in some other objects to create a distinctive area.  I don't know if this was the right thing to do with culling the whole of the outside and starting it again, but I feel without changing it I wouldn't have improved my work all that much and wanted to create a comfortable, non-sculptor like space.

I will now go through and photoshop into all of the images. If I had time and availability to an A3 printer than I would have printed them all again and drawn into them before photoshopping. Because of this I have coloured the spaces walls to my liking rather than doing this with pencil.